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I used to write of darkness.

Of a place so hollow and apathetic,

And my insignificant place inside it.

But silence was deafening,

along with solitude savage.

I suffocated on thoughts of oblivion.

And I floated there.


Unbreathing,


Unspoken,


Overlooking


my realm of


gray.










It wasn’t until I closed my eyes,
That I dreamed of COLOR.

C r e a t i o n   f l o o d e d   m y   l u n g s,
                             And  jump  started  my  blood  flow.

I was given all the universe

                                     .........Of which to shape into something  b e a u t i f u l..........


S o   I   g a v e   l i f e.

                               I   t o o k   c o n t r o l.

                                                        A n d     I     w o v e     l e g e n d s.


                                     I   c h o s e   t h e   u n a s s u m e d,
                                                    I watched them grow,  
                                                                       a n d   c h a n g e,  
                                                                                      A N D    C O N Q U E R.



         I hitched  a  ride  on  that  life-changing  journey.
                                               And while I saved this world
                                                                   bit
                                                                      by
                                                                        bit,
                                                              m y   p h y s i c a l   b o d y   m e n d e d.
                              I found my  s a l v a t i o n  through  c r e a t i o n.                                                                                                                          A n d   I   n e v e r   t u r n e d   b a c k.






I used to write of darkness.
B u t   d a r k n e s s   w a s   o n l y   t h e   b l i n d f o l d.
Just a true story.

I wasn't going to submit this one, but a friend convinced me otherwise. So I guess I'm not expecting this to be my best work or whatever, but maybe some words of inspiration to anyone out there feeling like I once was.


Yup. Comments are appreciated, and make me feel less stupid about my poetry :iconorzplz:
Yeah... walking away now..... yuppp
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:iconjbrenthill:
jbrenthill Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Fantastic!
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ascu75 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
Hi I am just going to send to my Vicar for use at church.Thank you for submitting it.
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I hope it offers some words of inspiration for those who need to hear it :)
I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for spreading the word! :hug:
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013   Writer
All I can say is wow! This is definitely one of the most ingenious poems I've ever read on here because not only did you write something with so much depth, you also made it where the font seemed to follow the flow of the poem. Great job! :D
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:iconzelaeii:
zelaeii Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!! I tried to express the meaning of my words more visually to have more of an impact on the viewer :3
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this is truly concrete poetry. Definitely different. Nice job
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is phenomenal! The way the creativity and flow took me through it (at an alarming rate)...even my pulse beat harder...:nod:
Then I just sighed contentedly at the end...**sigh**
I love this:heart:
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you~!! 
It's wonderful to hear that you experienced the 'rush' in this poem, I tried my best to put that feeling into words.
It isn't easy XD
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: It was phenomenal :glomp:
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GothKid173 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013
It`s beautiful <3
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you <3
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GothKid173 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
You`re Welcome
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buslimpan Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Though some words were hard to read, it's a really good poem! And how you got the words like that made it even better!

Those words tells me how it feels like to be a writer. Though I like more to come up with the ideas than to complete them >_< I hate myself for that... I want to be able to write a great story that is several chapters T.T

 

Sorry about the last part, ^^'

 

Great poem!

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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much! :hug:
Ideas are wonderful, but nothing's quite like seeing them become something real. I hope you can find the patience to write a story! It doesn't have to be the best, as long as you enjoy writing it!
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buslimpan Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the encouraging words Hug  I will try my best :)
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BishopXavier Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
I'm glad you have friends like that!
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I am too! <3
Thank you!!
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Monsterintheshadows Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
This is realllllyyy goooddd
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:iconzelaeii:
zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aww thank you so much!! :love:
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Monsterintheshadows Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
Your welcome!!La la la la 
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IrelElengar Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
You are a painter with words, beautiful and flowing, blending and artistic.
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:iconzelaeii:
zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Words are just another medium to me <3

Thank you so much, it really does mean a lot to me!
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Animay813 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student General Artist
that was awesome.
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:iconzelaeii:
zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks so much <3
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Animay813 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Student General Artist
you welcome :3
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PrincessInaphit Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
LOOOOOVVEEEEEE :iconyaysplz:
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:huggle: Thank youuu!!!
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Emerald-Alexandria Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
This is gorgeous. I love how flamboyantly it flares out in the end
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:iconzelaeii:
zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much! It means a lot <3
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BluishShimmer Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully written and I love what you've done with the artistic touch, I'm a writer but if I think of the imagination being colourful I think this poem works well for me too. ;)
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BluishShimmer Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome!:D (Big Grin) 
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:iconzelaeii:
zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much, I'm glad to hear it! :3
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ShiGaHoshii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, awesome! I love the form of it. Pretty!
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!! It was fun to write! :iconsupertighthugplz:
 *cough* when are you going to submit something? *cough**cough*
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ShiGaHoshii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe you should write more then~~~~~~~~~~~
*COUGH**cough**cough*
*cough* *cough* probably not soon *cough*
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Someday.... when I am not afraid of all you anonymous people online.... someday............

but that wasn't a never >D
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ShiGaHoshii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You shouldn't be afraid of us, child. We love you. Join us. Come to us. We shall be a happy family.

*starts chanting* One of us. One of us. One of us...
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's rather ominous... 
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ShiGaHoshii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Not at all....
....We have chocolate muffins
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
o.o you may have just won me over.
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days-be-strange Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
I enjoyed this. Visually engaging and I especially loved the last two lines. Heart 
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much <3
It means a lot to me!
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days-be-strange Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013
welcome Heart
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Weaver8 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Student Writer
I can relate with this. When I was a teenager what I wrote a lot of the time was rather dark too. I still write dark things though. It kind of makes me happy, how odd. 

How easy was it to start writing more positive things? I know from my personal experience its pretty hard to get out of the habit of writing dark things. It kind of becomes an addiction I guess you could say '_'

But, anyway, this poem is quite interesting with how you use the fonts and spaces to reflect meanings that you intend for us to take away from this. It reminds me of a poet I studied recently, but I can't for the life of me recall his name. The poem was about a cricket? Grasshopper? One of those jumpy guys. Anyway, nice work again :D
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's not that I necessarily wrote happy stuff suddenly... just that before it was more about reflecting this inner void I had. I guess I stopped letting my loneliness consume me, and created something instead. I gave myself something worth caring for.

Sure, a lot of the subjects I cover are dark, but there's always an underlying hope. Characters grow and change, and though their world is bleak, they still manage. Being the writer, and knowing full well what's in store for later, makes the little happy moments shine. I guess it's the power we hold over these fictional people, and what we intend for them in the future. Maybe it's because I can dive into the dark subjects with the ultimate goal of a happy ending. (not like fluffy-rainbow-happy, I usually go more bittersweet.)  

To sum it up, I don't write anymore to dig myself into a deeper hole of depression (which I agree, is a complete addiction). I write to soar. And thus concludes my philosophical rant about my evolution as a writer. Yep.

Ahaha, I'm bad with names as it is, and that's not even taking famous poets into account. But thank you! I'm iffy about posting writing, so thoughtful comments are more than welcome :)
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lunarosehitachiin Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The concrete poem you did is awesome!!
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much! ^^
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lunarosehitachiin Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome. ^_^
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edns Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Student Writer
Amazing :wow:
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much!! :'D
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