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I used to write of darkness.

Of a place so hollow and apathetic,

And my insignificant place inside it.

But silence was deafening,

along with solitude savage.

I suffocated on thoughts of oblivion.

And I floated there.


Unbreathing,


Unspoken,


Overlooking


my realm of


gray.










It wasn’t until I closed my eyes,
That I dreamed of COLOR.

C r e a t i o n   f l o o d e d   m y   l u n g s,
                             And  jump  started  my  blood  flow.

I was given all the universe

                                     .........Of which to shape into something  b e a u t i f u l..........


S o   I   g a v e   l i f e.

                               I   t o o k   c o n t r o l.

                                                        A n d     I     w o v e     l e g e n d s.


                                     I   c h o s e   t h e   u n a s s u m e d,
                                                    I watched them grow,  
                                                                       a n d   c h a n g e,  
                                                                                      A N D    C O N Q U E R.



         I hitched  a  ride  on  that  life-changing  journey.
                                               And while I saved this world
                                                                   bit
                                                                      by
                                                                        bit,
                                                              m y   p h y s i c a l   b o d y   m e n d e d.
                              I found my  s a l v a t i o n  through  c r e a t i o n.                                                                                                                          A n d   I   n e v e r   t u r n e d   b a c k.






I used to write of darkness.
B u t   d a r k n e s s   w a s   o n l y   t h e   b l i n d f o l d.
Just a true story.

I wasn't going to submit this one, but a friend convinced me otherwise. So I guess I'm not expecting this to be my best work or whatever, but maybe some words of inspiration to anyone out there feeling like I once was.


Yup. Comments are appreciated, and make me feel less stupid about my poetry :iconorzplz:
Yeah... walking away now..... yuppp
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jbrenthill Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Fantastic!
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ascu75 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013
Hi I am just going to send to my Vicar for use at church.Thank you for submitting it.
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I hope it offers some words of inspiration for those who need to hear it :)
I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for spreading the word! :hug:
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013   Writer
All I can say is wow! This is definitely one of the most ingenious poems I've ever read on here because not only did you write something with so much depth, you also made it where the font seemed to follow the flow of the poem. Great job! :D
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!! I tried to express the meaning of my words more visually to have more of an impact on the viewer :3
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this is truly concrete poetry. Definitely different. Nice job
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is phenomenal! The way the creativity and flow took me through it (at an alarming rate)...even my pulse beat harder...:nod:
Then I just sighed contentedly at the end...**sigh**
I love this:heart:
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you~!! 
It's wonderful to hear that you experienced the 'rush' in this poem, I tried my best to put that feeling into words.
It isn't easy XD
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: It was phenomenal :glomp:
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GothKid173 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013
It`s beautiful <3
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